Ok, I'm writing this as I read. One: I know this is adult fic, but could a more tasteful vocabulary be used? It's reading to me that animal instincts and desires are taking over rather than a loving desire for her.
Two: He wasn't a man to want and not take what he wanted? WTF?! Jack's not like that, please! And already that reads, "You don't give me sex, I'll rape you." Nice, lady, nice. *note the heavy sarcasm*
Three: Yes, Jack would say fuck. He has quite a low vocabulary to use 'specially in the work area.
His tone turned playful even if his eyes were still pained. “It’s that easy Carter. You’re a smart woman, I’m sure you can figure it out. Do the math…” Ummm... does this make any sense to anyone? It certainly doesn't to me.
THis is bullshit. If Sam was going to be a proud woman, she would end the relationship because she would NOT have a man hit her. SHe is not some piece of rag for someone to just wipe himself all over and throw aside. THAT is pride, folks. What's in this story is sheer stupidity.
This Telkenna woman's got her own past issues. It's coming out so clearly in her writing. There are some things in it that I know I would've written had I never overcome and become that prideful woman as I described above. Yeah, if I, the weakest and most pathetic of all living beings, can be proud and strong to say that no man will touch me disrespectfully or belittle me, then Sam is absolutely the one who'd be that.
WTF?! She had not missed one day at work. She had not asked for medical leave. Umm, I recall earlier that she called in sick a couple times. Which, btw, if we wanna get technical, that's not allowed unless you have a medical record of it. Amen for my bro being a Tech Sgt. in the Air Force.
Yeah, I've stopped reading after getting halfway of part 2. Sorry for wasting space. This stuff is crap.
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Two: He wasn't a man to want and not take what he wanted? WTF?! Jack's not like that, please! And already that reads, "You don't give me sex, I'll rape you." Nice, lady, nice. *note the heavy sarcasm*
Three: Yes, Jack would say fuck. He has quite a low vocabulary to use 'specially in the work area.
His tone turned playful even if his eyes were still pained. “It’s that easy Carter. You’re a smart woman, I’m sure you can figure it out. Do the math…”
Ummm... does this make any sense to anyone? It certainly doesn't to me.
THis is bullshit. If Sam was going to be a proud woman, she would end the relationship because she would NOT have a man hit her. SHe is not some piece of rag for someone to just wipe himself all over and throw aside. THAT is pride, folks. What's in this story is sheer stupidity.
This Telkenna woman's got her own past issues. It's coming out so clearly in her writing. There are some things in it that I know I would've written had I never overcome and become that prideful woman as I described above. Yeah, if I, the weakest and most pathetic of all living beings, can be proud and strong to say that no man will touch me disrespectfully or belittle me, then Sam is absolutely the one who'd be that.
WTF?! She had not missed one day at work. She had not asked for medical leave.
Umm, I recall earlier that she called in sick a couple times. Which, btw, if we wanna get technical, that's not allowed unless you have a medical record of it. Amen for my bro being a Tech Sgt. in the Air Force.
Yeah, I've stopped reading after getting halfway of part 2. Sorry for wasting space. This stuff is crap.