Badfic

[lyssie]

http://www.fanfiction.net/read.php?storyid=1101707
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Angel is in an Ally fighting two vampires. He falls too the ground and out of the corner of his eye he sees a girl running. His mind flashes back to a few years ago there is a beautiful 14-year-old girl in a home. She plays with a silver cross necklace. Angel's mind suddenly comes back into reality. He gets up and steaks the vamps. Some kind of rage had come into him. He couldn't figure out what it was coming from though. There were 2 other vamps in the ally.
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There are so many things wrong with that...

Comments

[drake57.livejournal.com]

"Angel is in an Ally fighting two vampires"..gee must have been close in there in Ally McBeal
was this written by a 12 year old,i'd think someone older would spell better or grasp the concept of sentence structure.
i wonder if he BBQ'd those steaks he used?

[obsidian179.livejournal.com]

*skims over story*

*whimpers*

Ow, it hurts...

I might think about listing this in marysues, if I could bring myself to read it thoroughly enough to see if it qualified.

[alryssa.livejournal.com]

He steaks the vampires? He slaps them around with large pieces of meat?

*falls off her chair laughing*

[thatpalebluedot.livejournal.com]

OW.

And...dude. What's with the tilde and dashes instead of proper quotations? Yikes!